It was night time before Christmas I was sitting on the ground watching my owner jumping on her soft bed.
Then I saw the dad making the new trampoline it was very cold. I was looking outside the big sliding door window.
I saw some animals jumping on the new trampoline they
were communicating with each other.
The orange fox said, “this is really fun.”
The other fox is Tom. He said “that the new trampoline was fun.”
The black and white skunk said, “the trampoline is fantastic.”
The Hedgehog said, “that new trampoline is so fun.”
The squirrel said, “this is fun. “
They decided to leave the trampoline because they were tired after all the jumping.
Then it was morning I ran down the stairs.
When they opened the big sliding door window I quickly ran out and I jumped on the new trampoline.
I was really happy and excited and I never wanted to stop jumping.
My owner was disgusted and not happy.
great work shanarina i like your work but you need to add more detail
ReplyDeleteHi Shanarnia, I really like your writing. But next time you could put more sentence,s in your paragraph but it is still awesome.
ReplyDeleteHi Shanarnia. I really like your Buster The Boxer story. But maybe next time put Facts at the top of your writing. Maybe you can fix some facts at the top because you did knot put WALT at the top.
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