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Tuesday, May 24, 2016

My worst day ever (draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
  • Title
  • Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
  • Sequence of events:  What happened?
  • Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft
                  My Worst day ever.


It is a sunny day in the African Savannah and I'm very
Excited because in my new place my papa and my mama are the biggest buffalo ever. I’m just a calf but one day I'm gonna be a big buffalo and I’m always safe with my dad.

It was a sunny day in the African Savannah and I felt warm from the sun. I could see some delicious buffalo walking along the river. Yum I see some lunch! I heard my lion friend starting to roar and then we chased the buffalo. I grabbed a baby calf by the body with my sharp teeth and sharp claws.  They caught  the baby calf