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Friday, September 2, 2016

Shanarnia Space Chimp.


65 years later
5 4 3 2 1 Boom! I miss my friend. His name is Jack  he trained  me and he taught me how to drive a space rocket .
I was doing my job`I didn’t sleep all night and I went  to the window and look for star and I saw some other planet and I look all the time and my trainer said Michael I will give you this picture.
And I put a my bag and I am happy to see the space.I Love
Banana but I can’t eat because I am wearing my helmet.
And Jack was in the moon and said we here in the space.  but we trap say Jack and said Carlo. i scare said Carlo  was little and he  sleep and Jack was go in the  space and  Jack. was looking the space and Carlo was touch in rocket he didn't know  what’s  that Carlo now the bottom .was  toy and Jack was said nooooooooo!!! Said Jacked and Carlo was crying and said Carlo Jack!! Said Carlo  I want banana . and he see the chimp and  anything and Jack was call in the phone and said Jack was said are you ok said Carlo. yes but i scare and said what are you scaring  said Jack.  said Carlo but no banana and air  and  so hot in the sun and Carlo was grow up and  Carlo was don't know what's going  on said Carlo was don’t no what's happened  he’s brine .

2 comments:

  1. Wow Shanarnia I really like your first draft because its really interesting. I can see you've have red writing on the name of Jack.

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  2. I hope you like my comment.

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